Chapter 4 Commentary (Read chapter on AO3)

Clef hadn't had the houjicha Umi had brought him yet, and the beginning of this chapter seemed like a good opportunity for him to enjoy his souvenirs. But given I'd left his tea in his study, I needed to make a couple adjustments to make it work.

I did do some adjustments to Umi and Clef's conversation about bringing Umi home to meet his family, and ended up adding to and rewriting a whole chunk of the conversations they have. As well as shifting the details of how their relationship has gone up until this point, because I'd never sat down to lay it out, so several comments through the fic were contradicting each other. 

Clef implementing a rule of only meeting in public spaces after Umi refused to let him ignore her does seem the most likely, so I've gone with that. And it also works very well for explaining why their relationship looks very different from an outside perspective.

I also added a little bit more background to Umi's masturbation scene, because I don't think I was as clear with the fact Umi had never done it in Cephiro before, so it was all very new while tensions were high. And I also made it more clear what Clef was noticing when he realised what she was doing when he stopped intending to apologise for letting things go too far.

And the biggest change to this chapter is Clef starting a contraceptive regimen. Given how far things go, it made so much more sense for him to decide to start something after all of that than to wait until after the ball.  Which does mean a few comments need shifting later on.

Chapter 3 Commentary (Read chapter on AO3)

I made two very noticeable changes to this chapter: Umi does not eat the cake now, and Clef also gets a reaction scene following the events in the library.

The more times I've reread this story, the more Umi eating the cake Clef made makes less sense. She doesn't like sweet things. Why would he go to all the trouble of learning how to make a cake like the ones she makes only to change the recipe to one she would eat when that's not the point. The point is that he's been trying to work out how she could continue her hobby if she moved to Cephiro.

If she moved to be with him.

So that's a change that felt like it was needed.

And then Clef having a reaction to the library scene also felt like it needed to be there. I wanted to highlight how he was feeling about everything that had happened, and how he was starting the realise that maybe he should rethink that whole idea that he wouldn't sleep with Umi this week.

Also we just get more of Kalos and Brisa teasing him. And make it very obvious that this is absolutely normal behaviour on their part.

This is also where I started exploring just how domestic Clef could be as a character. I kind of love the idea of him enjoying cooking as kind of the opposite to Umi's inability to cook. That's obviously something that I have had fun exploring in other things, particularly my Guru to House Husband series, which does spawn from many little things mentioned in Sanctuary that I don't explore here. But Clef cooking was something I really wanted as part of this whole first part where he's properly bringing Umi into his personal space, and letting her into his life in the way he's wanted to for months.

I might also just be sappy and having fun giving a peek into what their future could look like very early on with Umi chopping vegetables with him. They've been married in my mind for decades at this point. There is no escape.

As part of the whole Umi no longer eats the cake in the cake scene, I loved the idea of Kalos and Brisa being annoyed with Clef about that.

I did also change the conversation with Aveo probably a bit more than just a little tweak. Adding in comments about a morning after potion. And Umi now takes her first dose this chapter.  Because, if anyone was counting, it's a bit unclear whether or not she actually takes the fifth dose on the day after Honda falls off. Also, it makes more sense to start taking it after the events of library, and would also explain her lack of hesitation later that night.

Chapter 2 Commentary (Read Chapter on AO3)

I didn't change anything too major in this chapter. I just made some adjustments to Umi's motivations for poking around on Clef's desk. Less trying to "help", so much as just being nosey while wishing she could help him with his research.

I think I also made a few minor changes to the walk through the gardens, but nothing major.

In the very early version of the story, Getz and Aygo were simply more staff of Clef's house, the gardener and his nephew. But then I realised it worked better for Getz to actually be a healer given where I was taking the plot. I'd already decided when I started to rewrite of the 2012 version in 2017 that I wanted to have the new sections of Cephiro supported by some sort of circle of magic users, so it made sense to add him to that list. 

Umi waking up to find her curtains had been opened and breakfast on the table is also a hold-over from the 2012 version where Clef only had household staff, but I have kept it because I am too amused by the idea of someone coming up with breakfast for Umi as a pretence for actually checking up on if they had gone to bed separately or not, because everyone had absolutely started making wagers before Umi even arrived. I don't know who might have bet on the first night (any thoughts?).

Getz is named for the Hyundai Getz which is related to the Hyundai Accent, which is the last car I had before I moved from the USA to the UK, and Aygo is named after the the Toyota Aygo, which is the car my wife had when I moved over to the UK, and was still the car we had when I posted this chapter in 2017.

Chapter 1 Commentary (Read chapter on AO3)

This chapter was still clinging too much to my original 2012 draft, and too much of the plot had changed later for that to make sense. While I kept many elements and many sections are recognisable, if different now, I consider this  chapter a complete rewrite. I consider everything having been changed.

One of the big changes I've made is the conversation that leads to Umi going to stay with Clef. Umi makes the claim later that she invited herself to stay with Clef with the intention of seducing him. So I made some tweaks to her confidence to match it with later chapters. She wavered so much in the first few chapters because the plot was originally the two of them discovering their feelings and the application of alcohol leading to poor choices over the course of the week. But, honestly, I prefer the idea that both of them are absolutely aware that that they both are interested in a sexual relationship with one another and have been for months, which is how I have written the later parts, and some of the prequel stuff. So this chapter ought to match.

Also, it was just funnier to add in the invitation conversation and make it obvious they both knew the expectations that came along with the invitation -- even if Clef doesn't necessarily want to admit to himself that that's exactly what he'd agreed to when he let Umi come stay.

A lot of the changes are likely to include things I think are the funnier option that still works with the plot.

I did consider aging Umi up just a little in the rewrite, but I still think the complicated emotions of transitioning out of high school and into the adult world faster than expected work really well with the plot. Especially with the idea of Umi rushing this relationship out of the fear that something could happen to Clef or her and she would miss her chance with him.

I had originally planned for her to be 18, but I am terrible at math and didn't realise that she would only be seventeen until the very last month of her last year of school.

It didn't make sense to switch it to her going into her first year of university, especially since this Umi had already decided she wanted to move to Cephiro after school, forgoing university.

And I like the timeframe of Clef's repeals against the timing of everything. Though, I guess I could have moved everything up a year. But that wouldn't entirely work with Umi's decision that if 16 was old enough for marriage in Japan, it was obviously old enough to be counted as an adult in Cephiro, therefore she could claim to be a full adult at 17. And if she was an adult at 17, why would she try to wait until she was 18?

But I have added in an unquantified amount of time for the first two trips to Cephiro that does mean she's dubiously 18 at the start of the story anyway.

It could be interesting to write a version of this where Umi's a legal adult in Japan at 20 when they start a sexual relationship in Cephiro, and how that changes things. I think she would probably have had sex with someone else in that span of time, just to satiate some level of curiosity. Which would be an interesting change in the dynamic of their first time. But that's a different topic, lol

I thought it would make sense for Umi to mention the budget that had been mentioned in the final scene when Umi meets Aveo for the first time. Because Umi has no real filter between her thoughts and her speech sometimes. I felt Umi should also do a bit more exploring, even if she still gets bored because all the other rooms seem the same.

And also, it seemed silly to not show Umi's first visit to the kitchen. I shuffled a few conversations around because of that, like Umi asking about the clothes.

I made it more obvious that Aveo has a more familiar relationship with Clef now. Originally she was written as more of a head housekeeper/butler type character. But it is a lot more fun, and sillier to have her be not only a work colleague, but also a distant relation to Clef, so he is literally bringing Umi home to meet his family.

Aveo is named after my favourite car that I have ever owned. I adore Aveo my character, and I loved that car. I am so sad that I lost the car to a terrible hail storm.

Aveo would definitely know about the repeal vote, even if she doesn't mention anything to Umi about it.

Coming back to things I think are funny, I was amused by the idea of Clef refusing to say anything to Umi about the repeal because he'd decided that he was going to have self-control and not have sex with her during this visit, even is she asked. Mostly because he knew that if she knew that he'd spent the last however many weeks fighting to make it legal for them to have sex she would definitely insist they do it to celebrate the repeal.

I also realised in editing this chapter that Umi would absolutely bring Clef a gift of some sort when coming to stay with him. Not just a host gift, but a souvenir from her holiday the week before, as well.  It makes me wonder what other things she's brought him after various holidays with her parents, and if there might be a gift she brought him after the Festival celebration that basically ignited their sexual tension.

In trying to come up with something, I remembered all the sponsor reads for boxes like Sakura Co, and went to see what Kyoto specific stuff they were selling, and when I saw the houjicha brownies, I decided those were prefect, especially if she got him some houjicha to go with it.  I must admit that houjicha is one of my favourite types tea. It's been roasted and because of that puts me in mind of a cross between coffee and tea. I wonder if Cephiro has any roasted type drinks at all.

While working toward finishing my longest Rayearth fanfic, Sanctuary, I have been going back through the earlier chapters to fix things that bugged me about them, and to also get them to vibe correctly with the later chapters, since I didn't know the whole plot when I first started writing and it is very obvious on a reread right now. 

I will be adding some notes to chapters with big changes as I update them, but I also thought it would be fun to do a more detailed post with what I've changed and why, as well as my thoughts about the chapter. I miss the old trend of author commentary from the LJ days. Why not use this space to do that for my fanfic.

If you are coming over here from AO3 and would like to chat in this thread as I post updates and commentary, you are more than welcome to join the forum to do so. Registration is open, but it has to be manually approved before you can start posting, so it may be a wait of a day or two for me to log in to see the notification for approval unless you shoot an email to the forum email account or my personal one on AO3 to let me know you need in. It's a spam measure, sorry for the inconvenience.

Commentary Posts by Chapter:

Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3
Chapter 4

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At the beginning of the manga, Umi wails about Cephiro's lack of Haagen Daz, which feels slightly incongruous with her dislike of sweets, but I suppose not all ice cream is particularly sweet.

What sort of ice cream flavours do you think she likes best?

On the topic of ice cream, what sort of flavours do you imagine the other characters might enjoy?

Do you think any character in particular might be too lactose intolerant to enjoy ice cream?

Our washing machine caught fire last week, and choosing a new one is so annoying!

So, I just started playing for the first time two weeks ago. Despite not playing for the last week, I've already put in over 60 hours, and I have gotten married, we have one baby so far, and I'm halfway to finishing the community centre.

It's been a really nice distraction during a rather stressful week.

Anyone else playing?

2 June 2024, TMS announced that they would be releasing a new Magic Knight Rayearth anime series.


A rough translation of the text in the teaser:

「CLAMP」 is working on
A legendary isekai adventure story
Shidou Hikaru
Ryuuzaki Umi
Hououji Fuu
30 years since the anime broadcast
Once again, the girls with be able to meet
A new anime project begins now!

Let's use this thread to share info about the new series as we learn it.

Discussion about hopes and expectations should be kept in New Anime Discussion

So, some of us already talked about little about this in the Discord server on the day, but what are your thoughts about the new anime announcement?

What do you hope will happen or expect to happen in the new version of the series?

It's difficult to believe that this forum is 19 years old this year. In the last two decades, I have made very few changes to the features I set up when I very first created the forum on an impulse, so it was more than time for a proper refresh.

Here is a list of what I have changed and why:

Created a custom registration agreement and added a privacy policy
For basically the entire life of this forum, we have been rolling on under the default SMF registration agreement. This is not necessarily compliant with the various internet laws that have come into place since I chose to install SMF on psynos.net in 2006.

The Rules
Like the registration agreement, this forum has also run on several barely altered versions of the same rules I roughly sketched out in the very first week of this forum's life. This week, I have completely rewritten the rules to make them more clear and to cover the new requirements for social platforms.

2-Factor Authentication
Now, I cannot take credit for this change, but I feel like it is worth mentioning. The newest SMF update brought with it the option to set up 2FA using an authenticator app. This can be set up in account settings.

New Themes
One of the most obvious changes to the forum is the removal of the original theme. It was out of date and did not work with the newest version of SMF.

All of the new themes are responsives, so the forum is now more easily accessible on mobile devices. And both Boru (the default theme) and NameX have easy to toggle dark/light modes.

If you still want the dark vibes with multiple accent colour options like the original theme, you can choose the NameX theme in the Look and Layout section of your account settings.

Category & Board names
Anyone who joined the forum before this month would know that the title of the various sections of the board were titles of the various image songs. I had chosen to do this because the forum's entire layout was inspired by a Witch Hunter Robin forum that I was frequenting at the time, and that forum had labeled all the sections with episode titles. While this worked well enough, the unclear section names were confusing to some.

All boards and categories are now clearly labeled with their topics and the descriptions have also been updated for clarity. Any topics that no longer fit within their board have been moved to a more appropriate location.

Mature Fanart
Because of new regulations that assume children will join despite breaking the rules by lying about their age, I am locking NSFW fanart behind a moderated age-gate. While I do not believe that beautifully drawn naked bodies count under the pornography rules, I am not taking chances.

Private Messaging has been disabled
This choice is related to the same regulations that led to age-gating nude fanart. I do not believe that any of the long-term members of this forum would be inappropriate with underage members that may join in the future, but even as the administrator, I cannot see others' private messages unless they have been reported for moderation.

With the future release of a new anime that could potentially lead to an influx of new members, I felt it safest to just remove that vector for potential abuse for the time being.

Changed the post-count membergroups
Previously, your post count changed your member group to be one of the various Cephiran titles that had been put in an order based on my own preferences. I have since decreased the post-count groups by two and have changed the names of them to steps to reach Cephiran citizenship.

The new post-count based groups:

• Tourist
• New Arrival
• Visa Applicant
• Visa Holder
• Permanent Resident
• Cephiran Citizen

For those who liked having the titles, there are now optional member groups that can show up with your avatar above your post-count based rank. These are the translations of the Cephiran titles and can be found in your account settings in the Primary Membergroup dropdown menu.

The new optional membergroups:

• Illusionist
• Mage
• Priest
• Smith
• Summoner
• Swordsman

This is not a completely comprehensive list, but it is the changes long-time members will most likely notice.

It seems like every time I look away for too long we get another influx of bots. The most recent round came in and started posting links to who knows what.

To combat this, we are back to moderator approval of new accounts. I have also added a dozen security questions. New members will have to answer three randomly chosen ones at registration.

There is also a new favourite character(s) profile field that is not only required at registration, but longtime members will be prompted to fill this out if they wish to make changes to their profile. I hope you don't mind this too much. It just seemed like a good measure to help weed out bots that make it past the security questions.

I hope the other options above would let me lift mod approval in the future, so there isn't so much of a barrier to pass before new members are able to post, but we'll see.

I've lost access to my account, what do I do?
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If you believe someone's post is in violation of the [url= https://cephiro.psynos.net/index.php?topic=650.0]Rules or Terms of Service, please report that post to the moderation team. 

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Then let us know what rule or term it violates.



The moderation team will review it as soon as possible.

How do I change my username?
You cannot change the username you chose during registration, but you can change the name others see by changing your display name in your account settings.

If you still would rather change your registered username, please email cephiro@psynos.net from the email account associated with your forum account.

This email should include:

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This change will be made for you as soon as possible.

How do I change or remove my optional Membergroup?
In your account settings, you can access the Primary Membergroup dropdown.



Whatever option you choose here will show up under your name beside your posts. Choosing (no primary membergroup) will remove that line from your sidebar display.

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Hello, welcome to the Cephiro Forum!

Before participating in forum discussion, please read the rules below as well as the Terms of Service and the Privacy Policy. The rules are not necessarily comprehensive and are subject to change. If you have feedback or suggestions about the rules, please let us know in Help & Feedback.


All posts should be in English for moderation purposes.
Discussions about the various translations of the series with quotes are more than welcome, but the majority of text in posts should be in English.

I. Conduct

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No character hate posts.
Your loathed character is likely someone else's favourite character, possibly for the very reason you dislike them.

No shipping wars.
One of the wonderful things about Magic Knight Rayearth is how the variety of characters and their interactions with one another make it easy to pair characters off in dozens of different combinations, so the chances of someone shipping a pairing you don't like are quit high. Let's be respectful of this harmless difference in opinions.


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While there are many different colours and fonts available to use in your posts, try to avoid using bright colours that are difficult to read for the bulk of your post.

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While the topic might come up in discussion in other boards, any explicit discussion should be moved to Mature Discussion.

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While it is obviously impossible to completely shed the reality of the world and the events happening around us, let's try to keep discussion of them off the boards. Let's try to keep this place an escape rather than a place to vent.

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