Chapter 6 Commentary (Read Chapter on AO3)
Given the reaction to Caldina's later outburst in chapter 21 I realise that it makes more sense to lay out her feelings about this relationship more clearly in what she says to Umi after she and Ferio separate Umi and Clef for the rest of the evening. And also let Umi realise just how it looks from an outsider's perspective, because not everyone realised how much time she and Clef were spending together.
I also adjusted the questions Stanza and Dokker ask about Umi, because they love gossip and are beyond amused about Clef's whole thing with Umi now that it's so much more obvious.
Other than the small change of when they started taking their contraceptives, those are probably the most notable changes.
Given the reaction to Caldina's later outburst in chapter 21 I realise that it makes more sense to lay out her feelings about this relationship more clearly in what she says to Umi after she and Ferio separate Umi and Clef for the rest of the evening. And also let Umi realise just how it looks from an outsider's perspective, because not everyone realised how much time she and Clef were spending together.
I also adjusted the questions Stanza and Dokker ask about Umi, because they love gossip and are beyond amused about Clef's whole thing with Umi now that it's so much more obvious.
Other than the small change of when they started taking their contraceptives, those are probably the most notable changes.