Beta for first bit of Mid Knight Skies?

[Mokonalord]

So, I've started on Mid Knight Skies, my fic about Ascot, Caldina, and Lafarga during the season gap, for Camp NaNoWriMo, and got the first draft of Ascot's intro done (basically chapter one). It's not long, maybe at or just under 2k words, and I was wondering if anybody would be interested in looking over it with a fresh set of non-totally-Ascot-biased eyes for me.

Basically, I'm looking for errors, things that need more explanation or expanding or just didn't read well, anything in particular you liked or didn't like about it, if you think something about the style needs work, etc. Let me know if you're interested.

[suzanami]

I'd love to! <3  shoot me an email, sunnybunch at gmail.